Category: Writers Block
Miss undering standings
How I try to keep my feelings from being locked inside.
How I try to get you too understand I learned not too keep my emotions inside, yet you did not underwstand, you just said "I keep my emotions tucked inside my hand."
You screemed at me "its you I do not understand."
I screemed "open your dam hand, and let your emotions come forth on me while you screem."
You said, "I'll do nothing of the sore, its wrong to let them go."
I screemed "hell no" let them go.
I screemed "when you keep them tucked away you kill me emotionally everyday."
I screemed "just fucken trust me if you please, open up and stop killing me."
Daniel. wow. It sounds interesting. I can see where this is comming from.
Heavenly bliss
There I lay in heaven's arms forever to stay.
Her sweets lips against mine, oh! How they taste sweet like whine.
I can feel her emotions flow, melting on me like melting snow.
Her body screams for more and more exticy as she is rapped around me.
O, how I feel my little Niagara water falls flow, in them I swim to and fro.
Yes! I can here her mown of pleasure screaming out to me, begging me to take her to an eternal exticy.
again Daniel. I love your writing style, and how you can rhyme. I must admit. You're a good poet and I give this one a 10 out of 10
Wow! Great poems! Very powerful and erotic!
First one is powerful, and I agree with my sis, Hmm, the second one is irotic indeed. Good job. :)
I loved the second one. most definitely. Makes me want to write a little maybe of the story veriety
Sorry didn't see your qn before you left. Very well written. Not only did you show what you meant to, but they actually flowed, something I think a lot of things that are called poems do not. Good writing.
wOW sTARFLY; i LOVE BOT HOF THESE POEMS: tHEY ARE GREAT:
<smiles> wow, great job.
I wish I could write as good.
Hey great pieces of work, they touched me . keep up the good work .
Kat A.K.A. Heavy Metal Girl 85
Agreed.
Flash Back
Have you ever been forced to raise your hand to the one you love?
Have you ever wished that someone would have finished you off?
Do you live with the after thoughts of what you did, knowing if you left sooner your fist would have never touched her face?
These memories can never be erased.
Some times I can see her face, picture her screams.
Some times I wish it was me.
I know I yelled know more but she was persistent and through me to the floor.
I retaliated and shoved back, as she went splat.
These memories are like ghost, reminding me of my past.
Reminding me someone should have kicked my ass.
Hurting Pain
O, how I wish with each slap I never raised my hands and fist.
O, how I wish, I just took the physical pain walked away never raised my hands again and again.
O, how I wish she did not push me to use my fists.
These memories are like ghosts in my mind, songs will haunt me through my life’s time.
I like your style of writing. Great job!
Note for my gf
Changing Times
Some days how I wish that my second best friend could see the pain she sometimes causes in me.
O, how I wish she could accept my bf for who he is, and I could have him in my arms when she has hers.
How I wish she could see the hurt.
O, how I wish she could see the pain she causes me when it’s just a one way her way or know no way.
O, how I wish she could see the pain she brings to me when she brings her bf with her when it’s just supposed to be my best friend, her and me.
O, how I wish she could change so she would not cause me pain.
Heavenly Intertwined
With her lips locked with mine, and her body intertwined.
She took me to heaven when she passionately kissed me and let me in.
O, how I was taken away, when her honey wine began to flow, and from her a beautiful song rose.
O, how I was carried away by angels on that love making day, when her hands caressed me, and when I got lost in her ecstasy.
Excellent poems! I wish I could write as well as that!
wo... I love them? I can't think of anything else to say.
Move That Bit Me in The Ass
In my mind, I see a dim silver sky line.
Two stars sit above me; one has a “A” and the other a “J”.
“A” is by me but is not holding me. “J” wants to hold me; I just sit away with teers in my hearts eyes.
Watching “A” sit never by.
My heart longs for “A”’s touch, kisses and to kiss her very much.
“J” wants to hold me, kiss me and keep me for eternity.
My heart screams for “A” but she is not hearing me no way.